Clean Intro I Recorded

[Alurkz]

Hey I just recorded this intro and wanted to get some opinions on it. Thanks in advance.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GgPvGmM5zkc

[Trem]

sounds pretty cool -

[Alurkz]

Thanks man

[BenoA]

Good and interesting!

[Alurkz]

Thank you BenoA. Does anyone have any critiquing on what they didn't like about it or what could be made better?

[RacerX]

I like it, except for your use of the phrase "what not"

[Alurkz]

I like it, except for your use of the phrase "what not"

Really? That was my favorite part All jokes aside, thanks.

[Trem]

put it in my favorites -
I think it sounds really good man, to me it's beyond my writing/tracking skills so i think it kicks ass so-

couple of notes aren't as smooth in the execution, there that's all i got

[Alurkz]

Thanks Trem. Are they not smooth because of the recording, the playing, or how it's written?

[Trussrod]

I have to agree--that was interesting. I'd really like to hear what comes after it.